Category: Writing Tips


What, me evil?

This morning’s meditation is on justifying our fictional villains. Do we need to explain them? Shall we establish empathy or at least psychological understanding, or just bring on the evil?

And if understanding and empathy is a matter of degree–as so much is in writing–how far shall we go?

The commercial villain

Sometimes the choice is obvious, as when we are writing straightforward commercial fiction. Or is it?

I recently saw the New York production of Spiderman, Take Back the Dark. The first act spent a lot of minutes showing how the Green Goblin became evil . . . and this was a show based on a cartoon. We saw a genius scientist who commited the sin of hubris, but paid the price through the death of his wife. Not that this show was a nuanced piece of work, but: you can see how the choices are not obvious. The writer makes the decision.

Continuing in the theme of monsters, in Jennifer Rardon’s urban fantasy book, Once Bitten Twice Shy the author does not for a minute bother to justify the vampires. They are evil, period. We neither see them justify nor (thankfully) listen to them explain why their lifestyle is really A-okay.

Literary evil

Sometimes the story wants a deeper take on the antagonist. Perhaps the story is complex and the characters, layered. Presuming that we even have an antagonist (see my post on the Forces of Antagonism), then we may want to show how the villain sees himself as justified, or is seen by the reader as justified.

The torturer Glokta from Joe Abercrombie’s Before They are Hanged is an example of character doing great evil, yet who wins the reader’s empathy. This is accomplished through Glokta’s brilliant point of view. Perhaps Glokta is rather a very dark hero than a villain. But the point remains, how much do you justify evil? Showing Glokta’s constant physical pain and describing (with restraint) his horrendous backstory is an attempt to partially justify or lead the read to forgive, evil actions.

If we are not expert at characterization, though, this kind of emphasis on the villain can lead to dilution of the tension and pacing. Why should the reader  root for the hero against someone we also root for?

In literary stories, you may not wish to set up such a struggle. So, again, it’s all in the needs of the story.

No whiners, please

Lately–in character-based commercial fiction–I’ve been feeling as though the nuanced antagonist is being a bit over done. It is especially prevalent in stories where the antagonist has been given a point of view. The POV may mean that we will have an elaborate presentation of self-concept that may include:

  • Everyone is like me; you’d all act like me if you were brave enough.
  • I have a huge capacity for life and need a larger stage than you do to find fulfillment.
  • I’m of my culture–and here are the decent underpinnings of it.  Your ways and mine can’t co-exist.
  • I’ve suffered beyond what you could endure. Also: I’m suffering because you have what I desire.
  • I can’t help myself, I’m mentally troubled.
  • and so on, ad infinitum

Frankly, sometimes showing us the inside of these characters actually diminishes a good antagonist. All this navel-gazing. How can this character generate tension if they are crying in their beer or so eager to rationalize?

We all have our flaws and mine is being wicked

While justifications of evil add some interest, the strategy can  also slow the pace. When you think of all the pages you need to describe and show a major character (call it 50), how many complex characters can you afford to have? What gets short-shrift because we fear having a “cardboard villain”?

Think of the lovely examples of restraint, where the depth of the work doesn’t suffer: Circe in Song of Ice and Fire by George R.R. Martin. We have a character (many characters in that series) who are a great joy to hate. Making them more self-knowing would do damage to the story.

More examples: Mrs. Colter in Pullman’s His Dark Materials. Or the two bad guys in Gaiman’s Nevermore. The authors just allow us to hate them. Frankly, it’s a relief. And oh, how the heart soars when Milton has Satan say in Paradise Lost, “Better to reign in hell than serve in heaven!” Here is a villain who is against God, for crying out loud, and almost every modern reader loves him.

Most of us, as readers, aren’t moral philosophers. We don’t want cookie-cutter villains, but we don’t need the villain’s complexity to include elaborate justifications.

A light touch will do.

And the line, “We all have our flaws and mine is being wicked?” –From James Thurber, The 13 Clocks.

 

 


Doubt and desire

We hear a lot about making clear what the main character of a story wants. Desire leads to motive and thence to action. It’s a powerful catalyst for plot.

But desire isn’t homogeneous. It has fluctuations. Desire weaves its various fluctuations differently in different characters. That’s why there’s a danger in taking “what a character wants” too much at face value, especially for stories where characterization greatly matters.

I explored the idea of a character’s outright mistaken desire in this recent post. But today I’m talking about subtle gradations in a true desire, one the character will fulfill.

Latching onto character desire as a guiding principal may make the story appear wooden. The reader may feel manipulated. Family killed by marauding soldiers? Hero shut down and seeking revenge? Okay, got it–but what about doubt?

Doubt and desire

When a main character feels doubt about whether the object of desire is worthy, he or she may seem less than heroic. Do we really want that?

We do. It is even necessary.

It’s necessary because, for one thing, it keeps the reader guessing and adds tension. Giving up? Oh no! For another thing, it can increase empathy.

How do we look at people in our lives who never doubt? We see them as obsessive, perhaps. Self-satisfied. Narrow. It takes a master story teller to make Ahab in Moby Dick a worthy protagonist. The rest of us may want to tell a story more within our grasp.

I’m not talking here about a character who doubts it can be done–that is a plot moment that can be a dark night of the soul, and it’s another great tool in the fiction kit. I’m rather talking about one who doubts it should be done.

Does the outlaw ever wonder if his course of slaughter is destroying him? Does the main character’s quest ever seem worthless to her? Is there a point at which the love of the one person requires a sacrifice too great? (Dilemmas can be lovely foils for desires on the verge of becoming annoying!)

While we definitely want to establish the hero’s desire–I am in no way saying that it’s not important–I am saying that there is a place for complexity, and complexity will require doubt.

One way to weave this in is to introduce the price.

The cost of desire

Nothing comes without a price. For one thing, we have limited time and energy and thus we face choices between competing good things. In heroic action, the main character may lose something that makes the success poignant. And more meaningful. He wanted it so much he gave up something dear to him.

And right there is a great chance for a moment of doubt. Who would not pause before sacrificing something dear?

Even if the story doesn’t entail a heroic sacrifice, who, really, does not sometimes falter in their pursuit of the object of desire? How can we even relate to a character  who never stops to consider the price they are paying?

Therefore, doubt.

A fine balance

For most stories, doubt must be treated like a powerful spice. A little goes a long way.

Let’s not, for example, have an anguished main character who can’t decide what she wants, unless you really must write such a story (and good luck selling that one.) My advice is to not introduce moral dilemmas right away or more than once. And a couple moments of doubt, carefully dramatized, will be enough. Do you need to make explicit that the doubt has been overcome? Yes. But you can do that through action rather than internal monologue.

As with all aspects of fiction, it’s the author’s job to judge when and how much; what to put in and what to leave out. No one can teach us that. Our beta readers will have different opinions. The writer must decide.

It’s a fine balance of how much a character can doubt, and how much boldly desire. I was going to suggest 90 percent sure, 10 percent doubt, but that’s nonsense, of course. There isn’t a rule.

Alas, there are no rules. The writer decides.

 

 

 

 


Facing an agent

Sooner or later you’re going to find yourself face to face with an agent. It’s an important meeting, but an odd one. You have only a couple minutes to achieve your goal.

A couple minutes? Aren’t most agent appointments (at conferences) more like 10 minutes? Yes, but the most important part of that interview (by far) is the first few minutes.

The test of a writer

It’s in the first couple of minutes that you’ll demonstrate your grasp of story. Read More »


The rich are not like us

Some people get all the breaks. Like rich people and household-name authors. Sometimes it seems that you have to have money to make money and you have to be successful to succeed. That is, if you have certain advantages, all your efforts are disproportionately rewarded.

It reminds me of the oft repeated lament of authors that only those who don’t need more sales actually sell books at signings.

The rich–in whatever field–really do play by different roles than the rest of us. It’s not fair, and it hardly seems American. The myth of the land of the opportunity dies hard. We’re not all starting from the same place of visibility, contacts, appeal and privilege.

No one hates this more than I do, so for those of you who are getting in touch with resentment, I share your pain.

But given the truth of my post title, there are a couple of lessons that we can take away, and they are doosies. Read More »


This year no excuses

This year, we’re finally going to do it.

We’re going to buckle down and write more. If you haven’t started your dream project, you’re going to. If you’re stalled on the novel, you’re going to plow ahead. If you are mid-career and writing so very slowly, you are going to trust your fingers and type faster.

We’re going to pin our ears back and go straight down the middle to the goal posts.

Because if you’re not on the field, you’re not going to have the ball (pardon all the football talk, but ’tis the season) and if you’re not going to do it this year, then when?

The thing about writing

The thing is, you’re going to have to write a lot to have a career. It really won’t do to be a one-book wonder or a v-e-r-y s-l-o-w writer. The reasons for this are many, but generally have to do with visibility, dependability, building a base of readers, giving publishers something to sink their teeth into, promote and have faith in.

That being the case, it’s time to hustle, people. Read More »


What I Believe

Every December I find myself waxing philosophical about myself, the writing life, storytelling and the perfect lasagna recipe.

No, I’m not going to share my current lasagna recipe (some things are just too personal for blogging) but I am willing to share my articles of faith about writing. None of the following can be proven, but:

I believe that . . .

1. – the world is becoming a better place for writers.

2. – the writing life is the most rigorous program in the world for self-knowledge, inspiration and personal growth. And yes, I Have tried Buddhism.

3. – no matter how good a writer you are, you can always improve. And need to.

4. – the marketplace disciplines us, if we will only listen.

5. – to keep my writing fresh I need to move out of/beyond what I’ve done before.

6. – fine stories are much more important than fine writing.

7. – the most inexplicable part of writing is where stories come from. I  build novels up carefully, but where the glittering story kernel comes from in the first place remains an astonishing mystery. But if asked, I will always say: A PO Box in Spokane.

8  – despite my thwarted desire for a year on the NYT best seller list, I am mightily compensated in this work by my friendships with, and the company of, the people I’ve met in publishing.

9. – this story (whatever the current work in progress) is the best I’ve ever done. When I stop believing that, it won’t be fun any more.

10. – if I’m not giving back to aspiring writers and the writing community, my lasagna will turn watery and the top strip will be too crunchy.